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More Ugly Disagreements

It's been barely a month since my last litany of subject-verb agreement errors, but the file is overflowing once again. The topic is tedious, the errors exasperating. Readers notice and find it hard to understand why we make so many rather rudimentary mistakes. A good question.

Here's the entry from The Times's stylebook, which describes some of the pitfalls:

number of subject and verb. After a neither-nor construction, if the subjects are both singular, use a singular verb: Neither Dana nor Dale was happy. If the subjects are both plural, use a plural verb: Neither the Yankees nor the Mets were hitting. If one subject is singular and the other plural, use the number of the one nearer the verb: Neither the man nor his horses were ever seen again.

A verb that merely connects two elements in a sentence takes the number of the preceding noun or pronoun, which is the subject: Her specialty was singing and dancing and playing the violin. The verb most often used this way is to be. Others that can serve as connectors include appear, become, feel, look, seem, smell and taste. When the subject is the pronoun what, the writer must decide whether to construe it as the thing that (singular) or the things that (plural). Once the decision is made, all affected verbs must conform: What was remarkable was the errors made on both sides; What were most in demand were language ability and a degree in Russian studies.

When a verb is far removed from its subject, especially if another noun intervenes, mistakes like this may occur: The value of Argentina's exports to the United States are 183 million pesos. The verb should be singular because its subject (value) is singular.

Misidentification of the subject also causes trouble: Terry Cordeiro is one of those people who goes in for striking colors. The verb should be go, since the subject is who, which refers to the plural people. Test such constructions by reversing them: Of those people who go in for striking colors, Terry Cordeiro is one.

Sums of money are usually treated as singular because the focus is on the sum, not on individual bills or coins: Ten dollars buys less now than five did then. Similarly: Five pounds of rice feeds a family of four for a week (because the pounds are not counted one by one). Use the plural when the focus is on individual items: Three hundred parcels of food were shipped.

Total of or number of (and a few similar expressions, like series of) may take either a plural or a singular verb. In general, when the expression follows a, it is plural: A total of 102 people were injured; A number of people were injured. When the expression follows the, it is usually singular: The total of all department budgets is $187 million; The number of passengers injured was later found to be 12.

If couple conveys the idea of two people, treat it as a plural: The couple were married. But: Each couple was asked to give $10.

And here are some of the latest lapses:

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DVDs and, before that, VHS tapes have allowed audiences to catch up on shows for a long time - in fact, the popularity of “Family Guy” DVDs were partly credited with the 2005 revival of the once-canceled Fox animated comedy.

Here's perhaps the most common problem - an intervening phrase that throws us off track so we forget whether the real subject is singular or plural. Make it “the popularity … was partly credited.”

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Another tipping point were reports that Clarence Norman Jr., a former chairman of the Brooklyn Democratic Party and former assemblyman who was convicted of accepting illegal campaign contributions, had helped Mr. Thompson's get-out-the-vote effort, Mr. Hynes's spokesman, Jerry Schmetterer, said.

The subject, which determines the number of the verb, is the singular “tipping point.” Don't be led astray by the predicate noun “reports.”

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[Subheading] While Capitol Hill grinds to a halt, research and innovation suffers.

Occasionally two nouns joined by “and” are so closely linked that they can be treated grammatically as one unit: Whiskey and soda is my favorite drink. But normally such a compound subject is plural; make it “research and innovation suffer.”

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Charles Townsend, the chief executive of Condé Nast, was there as well. Oh, and so was David Remnick, the editor of The New Yorker; Graydon Carter, the editor of Vanity Fair; Stefano Tonchi, the editor of W; and Jim Nelson, the editor of GQ. …

The inverted word order apparently confused us; make it “were” to agree with the compound subject that follows.

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Michael Douglas was in the house. So was Mick Jagger and Al Pacino.

The very same problem. Mick and Al were, not was.

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Decades of experience with Medicaid, the program for low-income people, show that having an insurance card does not guarantee access to specialists or other providers.

Here's a subtler problem. “Decades” is plural and seems to require the plural verb “show.” But the phrase “decades of experience” describes an amount or extent of experience, not a number of separate items. So treat it as a singular: “Decades of experience … shows.”

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Laurence H. Tribe, a law professor at Harvard, is one of the skeptics who agrees with the White House.

No roundup of agreement problems is complete without this oft-bungled construction. The verb in the relative clause should be plural: of the skeptics who agree with the White House, Tribe is one.

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More recently, the Shabab have put Kenya in its cross hairs, especially after Kenya sent thousands of troops into Somalia in 2011 to chase the Shabab away from its borders and then kept those troops there as part of a larger African Union mission to pacify Somalia.

Don't treat the same word as singular and plural in the same sentence. Shabab is correct as a plural, so make it “the Shabab have put Kenya in their cross hairs.”

 
In a Word

This week's grab bag of grammar, style and other missteps, compiled with help from colleagues and readers.

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WASHINGTON - To Speaker John A. Boehner, it is “job-killing.” To Senator Ted Cruz, it is “hurting the American people.” To Senator Mitch McConnell, it is a “big reason we are turning into a nation of part-time workers.”

But to many independent economic analysts, it remains too early to tell how the sweeping Affordable Care Act will affect the jobs market.

The “its” in the first graf all refer to the same thing. But the next “it” involves a different construction and does not have the same antecedent, so the whole passage is muddled.

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On many of these cases, the outcome may depend again on a single vote - and often, but not always, that means Justice Anthony Kennedy, whose vote decided more 5-4 cases than any other member of the court last year.

The comparison is not parallel; it compares “vote” to “member.” One simple revision: “whose vote decided more 5-4 cases than any other justice's last year.”

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And while keeping guns out of their hands won't put an end to gun violence, it might at least mitigate against these ritual slaughters of innocent people.

Not the right word. Here's what the stylebook says:

militate, mitigate. Militate against something means exert weight or effect against it: High taxes militate against relocating the plant. Mitigate, which means ease or soften, is never the word to use with against: Tax reductions mitigated the financial pressure.

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“Save us from the madness,” the chaplain, a Seventh-day Adventist, former Navy rear admiral and collector of brightly colored bow ties named Barry C. Black, said one day late last week as he warmed up into what became an epic ministerial scolding.

O.K., I get the point, but it does look as though the bow ties are named Barry C. Black.

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Video footage from local television stations showed the bus on its side, blocking lanes of traffic, with the tractor-trailer partly off the road. Dozens of emergency vehicles surrounded the wreckage, which smoldered for hours.

“Video footage” seems redundant here.

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In another case, Mr. Ulbricht is accused of asking an undercover agent for the Federal Bureau of Investigation to kill a former Silk Road employee whom Mr. Ulbricht feared would become a government witness, according to an indictment.

Make it “who,” the subject of “would become.”

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While there is little evidence about how racism, sexual assault or drinking at Dartmouth really compare with its peers, it is undeniably different in several ways beyond the popularity of the Greek system.

The compound subject with “or” is singular, so the verb should be “compares.” But the bigger problem is that the comparison is not parallel. Rephrase to compare Dartmouth with its peers, or the problems of Dartmouth with the problems of its peers.

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Virtually every major turn in the legal process has sparked riots, either by Islamist or secularist protesters, and the authorities on Tuesday had increased security in the Bangladeshi capital, Dhaka, and in Chittangong, Mr. Chowdhury's native region.

Parallelism problem. Make it “by either Islamist or secularist protesters.”

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Under the high ceilings, the fluorescent lights still bright, there were just15 or so industrial sewing machines in a sprawling space meant for triple that amount.

Make it “triple that number” or “three times as many.”

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Twitter has several women vice presidents in business, not technical, roles …

Avoid “women” as a modifier. Make it “female vice presidents” or “women as vice presidents.”

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Ms. Kirshenbaum, a single parent to two adopted Guatemalan daughters and two cats, lives in a 13-by-30-foot row house near downtown Philadelphia.

The adoptive status of the children doesn't appear relevant and so should not be included.

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As trainees in a large teaching hospital, we knew numerous sales reps by name and the products they pedaled; and it was odd, even disappointing, to go to an educational conference where one of them was not standing next to a table laden with tchotchkes, information brochures and free take-out.

Peddled, not pedaled.

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In short, setting up the ideal home network is often easier said than done. There are ways, however, to make it less aggravating and more reliable.

See the stylebook entry:

aggravate. It means make worse, not anger or irritate.

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Not long ago, I met five young Yale alumna at a Vietnamese restaurant in Cambridge.

“Alumna” is singular; the plural (for women) is “alumnae.”

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The case, which is being coordinated by federal prosecutors in New York, is part of a larger push by federal authorities to police elicit commerce along the frontier of the Internet.

Illicit, not elicit, of course.

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But the Supreme Court's ruling on the health care law last year, while upholding it, allowed states to choose whether to expand Medicaid. Those that opted not to leave about eight million uninsured people who live in poverty ($19,530 for a family of three) without any assistance at all.

The phrasing was confusing because it's natural to read “to leave” together as an infinitive. Rephrase, perhaps like this: “Those that opted not to expand the program leave about …”

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The stumbles have proved particularly challenging because they arrived with Metro-North already at a crossroads. The railroad, which was brought under the transportation authority's auspices in 1983, has endured a spate of departures that have left several positions either vacant or filled by less-experienced employees.

The hyphen wasn't necessary.

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She was the eldest daughter of one of the only black families in Longmeadow, Mass., who arrived home to see their new house scrawled with racist graffiti. …

They are, in their relationship, their politics and, above all, their lifestyle, a striking departure from the city's reining pair, Michael R. Bloomberg and Diana L. Taylor, his longtime girlfriend.

Avoid the illogical expression “one of the only”; make it “one of the few.” Also, we meant “reigning,” not “reining” (fixed in later editions).

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Mr. Boehner even mocked the president on Monday for refusing to negotiate over health reform, as if he actually expected Mr. Obama to join in wrecking a law that will provide health coverage to millions of uninsured Americans under threat of blackmail.

Watch where you put those prepositional phrases; neither the provision of health care nor the millions of Americans are under threat of blackmail.



Red Pencils Ready?

For this week's roundup of grammar, style and other editing missteps, I turn once again to the popular After Deadline Quiz. Try to identify at least one problem in each of the following passages; my answers and explanations are below.

Thanks to colleagues and readers for contributions.

1. Ms. Ahrendts's rein at the top of Burberry has been a rewarding one for shareholders.

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2. Georgia Nell Blume and William Donald Sugerman are to be married Sunday at the Brooklyn Botanic Garden in Brooklyn.

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3. Revenge porn is one of those things that sounds as if it must be illegal but actually isn't.

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4. There are live webcams of her practicing at her home in North Carolina, long blonde hair tossing and brow furrowed in concentration as she reads through new works.

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5. A video featuring Patrick Stewart discussing domestic violence was uploaded more than six million times after it was posted in May.

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6. Mr. Giuliani turned to Tamra Roberts Lhota, a soft-voiced, unprepossessing native of Napa, Calif., who mapped out a yearlong blitz of New York City's big givers: nearly 300 house parties, law-firm breakfasts and sit-down meetings with real estate and financial barons.

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7. Mr. Obama's promise the day after the Sept. 11, 2012, attacks to bring to justice those responsible for the attacks in Benghazi, which resulted in the deaths of four Americans, and the lack of success so far, has led the Republicans to renew their criticism of the administration for its handling of the episode, as officials have made the case that Congress should authorize a military strike against Syria.

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8. Jason Baretz wore a striped convict's outfit as he addressed a group at Northern Valley Regional High School at Demarest on a recent Monday evening.

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9. The president also repeated, as many Republicans have acknowledged, that the House could pass measures both to finance and reopen the government and increase the nation's borrowing limit, averting a catastrophic default, if Mr. Boehner would allow votes.

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10. Cabrera walked and flew out in his first two at-bats, but he came up against Maurer in the sixth inning with the score tied at one.

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11. Transfer all the money directly to a charity that has no political underpinnings or simply forego your claims entirely and move on.

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12. Mr. Koppelman and Mr. Levien have engaged in this kind of latter-day rat-packery before - in their scripts for “Rounders,” “Knockwound Guys” and “Ocean's Thirteen” - but usually with more verve and intelligence than is evident here.

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13. “I'm the one who wanted to recruit her,” Ms. Brier said, adding that she likes to have women employees around her when possible.

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14. The company on Wednesday said it was eliminating the charges that a customer normally paid to use their phone number and data service in a foreign country, called roaming fees.

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15. The leading candidate to succeed Mr. Bloomberg, Bill de Blasio, a Democrat, is a no-bones-about-it critic of charter schools who rose to prominence in part by berating the mayor's educational agenda.

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16. Even before the announcement, he said, one journalist had invaded Dr. Higgs' building looking for an interview.

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17. Local women still adhere to centuries-old Islamic traditions, wearing the abaya, a long cloak, and niquab, or face covering; images of women are routinely censored in books and magazines.

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18. At the start of the school year on Aug. 28, she tried to register the children in two public schools near her new home. At both, she said, the principles told her to wait until a double shift system could be put in place, with one set of students attending in the morning and another, mostly Syrian, in the afternoon.

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19. In the fiscal year ending June 30, MacNeil/Lehrer Productions fell short in raising corporate underwriting for the show, and had to appeal several times to PBS for emergency cash infusions, according to public television employees familiar with the financial situation.

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20. Mr. Drexler was standing at his recently opened clothing store, Alex Mill, staring intently down at the socks, which were displayed unrolled, in a windowless frame, laying flat on a counter.

 
Answers

1. Ms. Ahrendts's rein at the top of Burberry has been a rewarding one for shareholders.

One of our most frequent homophone mixups. Reign, not rein.

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2. Georgia Nell Blume and William Donald Sugerman are to be married Sunday at the Brooklyn Botanic Garden in Brooklyn.

As opposed to the Brooklyn Botanic Garden in Queens? We seemed to follow our formula out the window.

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3. Revenge porn is one of those things that sounds as if it must be illegal but actually isn't.

As careful After Deadline readers surely know, in this construction, the relative pronoun “that” is plural (agreeing with “things”) so the verbs in that clause should be plural as well.

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4. There are live webcams of her practicing at her home in North Carolina, long blonde hair tossing and brow furrowed in concentration as she reads through new works.

According to The Times's stylebook, as an adjective it's always “blond.”

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5. A video featuring Patrick Stewart discussing domestic violence was uploaded more than six million times after it was posted in May.

Uploading refers to posting something online; this video was probably uploaded once, or maybe a few times to different sites. It was then viewed millions of times.

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6. Mr. Giuliani turned to Tamra Roberts Lhota, a soft-voiced, unprepossessing native of Napa, Calif., who mapped out a yearlong blitz of New York City's big givers: nearly 300 house parties, law-firm breakfasts and sit-down meetings with real estate and financial barons.

“Unprepossessing” means unimpressive or nondescript. It's clear from the sentence and even more clear from the overall context that we didn't mean that. Presumably we wanted something like “unpretentious” or perhaps “low-key.”

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7. Mr. Obama's promise the day after the Sept. 11, 2012, attacks to bring to justice those responsible for the attacks in Benghazi, which resulted in the deaths of four Americans, and the lack of success so far, has led the Republicans to renew their criticism of the administration for its handling of the episode, as officials have made the case that Congress should authorize a military strike against Syria.

Make it “have led,” plural. The subject is “Mr. Obama's promise … and the lack of success so far.” (The grammatical flaw suggests a bigger problem - the sentence is too long and cumbersome.)

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8. Jason Baretz wore a striped convict's outfit as he addressed a group at Northern Valley Regional High School at Demarest on a recent Monday evening.

O.K., maybe not an error. But I still couldn't help wondering: Do the striped convicts dress differently from the plaid convicts? Perhaps “a convict's striped outfit.”

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9. The president also repeated, as many Republicans have acknowledged, that the House could pass measures both to finance and reopen the government and increase the nation's borrowing limit, averting a catastrophic default, if Mr. Boehner would allow votes.

Not parallel. Make it “both to finance and reopen … and to increase” Or omit “both.”

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10. Cabrera walked and flew out in his first two at-bats, but he came up against Maurer in the sixth inning with the score tied at one.

In the baseball context, the past tense is “flied out.”

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11. Transfer all the money directly to a charity that has no political underpinnings or simply forego your claims entirely and move on.

A common error. Make it “forgo.”

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12. Mr. Koppelman and Mr. Levien have engaged in this kind of latter-day rat-packery before - in their scripts for “Rounders,” “Knockwound Guys” and “Ocean's Thirteen” - but usually with more verve and intelligence than is evident here.

Make it “more verve and intelligence than are evident here.”

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13. “I'm the one who wanted to recruit her,” Ms. Brier said, adding that she likes to have women employees around her when possible.

Don't use “women” as a modifier. Make it “female employees,” or rephrase.

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14. The company on Wednesday said it was eliminating the charges that a customer normally paid to use their phone number and data service in a foreign country, called roaming fees.

“Their” should not be used with a singular antecedent, in this case “customer.” A simple fix here is to make “customers” plural. (Also, the modifying phrase “called roaming fees” has roamed awfully far from what it modifies, “charges.”)

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15. The leading candidate to succeed Mr. Bloomberg, Bill de Blasio, a Democrat, is a no-bones-about-it critic of charter schools who rose to prominence in part by berating the mayor's educational agenda.

“Berate” means “scold,” and as with “scold,” the direct object should be the person berated, not the grounds for the criticism. Make it something like “criticizing” or “assailing,” or rephrase to say “berating the mayor for his educational agenda.”

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16. Even before the announcement, he said, one journalist had invaded Dr. Higgs' building looking for an interview.

The possessive of Higgs is Higgs's.

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17. Local women still adhere to centuries-old Islamic traditions, wearing the abaya, a long cloak, and niquab, or face covering; images of women are routinely censored in books and magazines.

The correct spelling is “niqab.”

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18. At the start of the school year on Aug. 28, she tried to register the children in two public schools near her new home. At both, she said, the principles told her to wait until a double shift system could be put in place, with one set of students attending in the morning and another, mostly Syrian, in the afternoon.

Principals, of course, not principles.

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19. In the fiscal year ending June 30, MacNeil/Lehrer Productions fell short in raising corporate underwriting for the show, and had to appeal several times to PBS for emergency cash infusions, according to public television employees familiar with the financial situation.

Ended, not ending. From the stylebook:

ended, ending. Use ended for the past, ending for the future: the weather for the period ended last Tuesday; the weather for the period ending next Friday.

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20. Mr. Drexler was standing at his recently opened clothing store, Alex Mill, staring intently down at the socks, which were displayed unrolled, in a windowless frame, laying flat on a counter.

Readers really hate this mistake, and so should we. Lying, not laying.



The Latest Style

This week, we've introduced a number of updates and revisions to our in-house stylebook, The New York Times Manual of Style and Usage. The changes are mostly modest and don't alter our goal of publishing clear, literate prose that is largely free of jargon, journalese, slang and sloppiness. But a lot has changed since 1999, when the stylebook was published. While we have updated many entries over the years, we thought it was time for a more systematic look. (For now, the updated style guide is available only to Times writers and editors. But we hope that the revised version may be published for general readers in the foreseeable future.)

Over the next couple of weeks, After Deadline will highlight a few of the changes.

Of course, we're deleting some outdated entries. Some are obvious - companies or other entities that no longer exist, for example. In other cases, we simply decided that a term was so unlikely to be used that even a prohibition seemed outdated. We don't expect a rash of college girls or authoresses in our pages, despite removing the caution flags from the stylebook. Dated, offensive or insensitive terms like mongoloid or admitted homosexual don't seem to require guidance any longer. And yes, we all know that bikini, for the bathing suit, is lowercase; no reminder necessary.

We couldn't recall anyone ever trying to use baldish instead of balding, so we decided guidance to that effect was not required. And it seems that the battle for debark instead of disembark, always quixotic, is now thoroughly lost, so that entry is gone.

A few other terms were once in the headlines but are now a part of history; we didn't feel they needed entries any longer. A-bomb and Tontons Macoute are examples.

 
Let's Get Technical

My colleague Patrick LaForge offers this overview of the online- and tech-related style revisions.

When the print stylebook came out in 1999, many of our readers were unfamiliar with online media. There were no iPhones or iPads. Blogs were still called Web logs. The future founder of Facebook was 15.

As technological change accelerated, we tweaked the stylebook here and there - shortening the World Wide Web to the Web, for example. The latest revisions continue in this spirit.

Many of the day-to-day entries have been revised with digital publication in mind - there are more references to The Times and fewer to “the newspaper.” We have eliminated outdated terms (diskette, DAT). For the spelling of corporate names, we mostly direct editors to official sites, instead of listing names separately in the stylebook, now that nearly all companies are online.

By popular demand, we're removing the hyphen from email. But we'll discourage other newfangled e-terms: keep the hyphens in e-book and e-commerce, for example. Better yet, just call them books and commerce, unless it is worth noting the digital format.

We're also going to follow The Associated Press and others in lowercasing the web. It is acceptable in all references to the World Wide Web, which should be used only for historical references (and keep in mind that worldwide is normally one word).

For consistency, we'll lowercase website and make it one word. Often, the simpler site or a more specific term is better. But the Internet remains uppercase, in line with the most common current practice in the United States.

A new entry spells out our policy on links (link generously, link often, link to related material a Times reader would want to see, link to articles that scooped us).

We've added a new entry on blogs and bloggers that codifies current practice (including a warning against saying a blog when you mean a post on a blog). There's a new entry that codifies our existing practice on tweet (which is somewhat informal, but acceptable as both a noun and a verb for special effect, or in articles about social media). There's also an entry on hashtags, which should be used sparingly.

You may now text a text on a mobile system. And we even offer guidance on LOL, OMG and other online and texting abbreviations (use them rarely and in the way readers are used to seeing them). But we'll hold the line against friend and Google as verbs, except in light contexts or direct quotations, or for special effect.

 
In a Word

This week's grab bag of grammar, style and other missteps, compiled with help from colleagues and readers.

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The Booker bestows an author with an instant boost in sales and recognition.

“Bestow” is a transitive verb; the thing given is the direct object. So make it “The Booker bestows an instant boost … on an author,” or use a different verb.

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Whether what they say is true, Mr. Palmer, wearing an Army-style camouflage hat but still in slippers, fled the property, his breakfast of eggs half eaten.

When the “whether” clause modifies a verb, as it does here, we need “or not”: “Whether or not what they say is true …”

Here's what the stylebook says:

whether. Often or not is redundant after whether, but not always. The phrase may ordinarily be omitted in these cases:

When the whether clause is the object of a verb: She wonders whether the teacher will attend. (The clause is the object of wonders.)

When the clause is the object of a preposition: The teacher will base his decision on whether the car has been repaired. (The clause is the object of on.)

When the clause is the subject of the sentence: Whether the car will be ready depends on the mechanic. (The clause is the subject of depends.)

But when a whether clause modifies a verb, or not is needed: They will play tomorrow whether or not it rains. (The clause modifies play.)

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Political resistance to Chinese acquisition of foreign-owned companies, particularly when issues of national security are at stake, have highlighted the dilemma.

The political resistance has highlighted the dilemma, not have.

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His ambitious composition uses both a full orchestra and a Gypsy band, with references to music from Klezmer to rap to Mozart.

Make it klezmer, not Klezmer.

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HONG KONG - The famine that gripped China from 1958 to 1962 is widely judged to be the deadliest in recorded history, killing 20 to 30 million people or more, and is one of the defining calamities of Mao Zedong's rule.

As the stylebook says, for a range like this, make it “20 million to 30 million.”

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The carrying of handguns is regulated in Texas: many residents are allowed to carry a concealed pistol if they receive a state-issued permit, but they are forbidden from carrying that weapon openly and unconcealed in public.

Make it “forbidden to carry.”

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The industry would most likely seek to spend money to influence the regulatory process that would determine where exactly the new casinos are, and who operates them, as well as to persuade a future governor and Legislature to ultimately allow full-fledged casinos in New York City or the surrounding areas, which would be much more lucrative because of its tourism and population density.

The overstuffed sentence is difficult to read. Also, the pronoun “its” does not agree with the plural “surrounding areas.”

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He mentioned Mr. Booker's campaign and Twitter messages to an Oregon stripper, and made a play on words to reference his own momentum.

From the stylebook:

reference is business jargon when used as a verb: She referenced the new transmission standards. More natural substitutes include cite, mention and refer to. But cross-reference (n. and v.) is conversational English.

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He steps outside at 2:30, as the waitstaff, having decided against going out for more drinks, disperses into cabs.

The stylebook discourages this coinage.

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In that case, and in this, much of the outrage has been driven by social media, with the hacking collective Anonymous among the most vocal players, lashing out against people that it believes have failed or mistreated the accuser.

The antecedent was people, so we meant “who it believes have failed …”

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At 45 feet, they passed a sunken ship, the Honey Bear, and at 85 feet, beneath the buoy line, they saw further evidence of the former marina - steel beams, pilings and sunken watercrafts.

In referring to a boat, the plural of craft is craft. So make this “watercraft.” (This was later fixed online.)

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If you're a Grisham obsessive with a C-note burning a hole in your pocket - not to mention two-and-a-half hours of time to slay - by all means, come on down, y'all!

The hyphens are unneeded and unwanted, and “of time” is redundant with “two and a half hours.”

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The stakes are high, and getting higher, as demand for tablets has exploded in the last few years.

“High stakes” is a cliché; let's seek alternatives.

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Deepak Chopra, the controversial New Age guru and booster of alternative medicine, lives just below the penthouse on the 69th floor of a Midtown West condominium.

Nearly everything and everyone we write about is involved in controversies, so this modifier often doesn't mean much. What's more, after raising this in the lead, the article never explains the controversy.

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The Red Sox grinded and muscled their way past the Tigers, knocking around Anibal Sanchez for the win and taking a three-games-to-two series lead.”

The past tense of “grind” is “ground.” Better still, let's avoid this locker-room cliché.

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Never an emotive figure, Mr. Cheney has long been reticent to talk in much depth about the five heart attacks and multiple surgeries he has endured.

“Reticent” means unwilling to speak freely. So he has been reticent about the heart attacks, or reluctant to talk about them. But not reticent to talk.

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Given the astronomic rise in house prices here, he wasn't speaking metaphorically.

“Astronomical” is the preferred form.